Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates given information how working adults in a particular nations spent their percentage of the day youth on various activities between 1958 and 2008.
overall,it can be seen that the proportion of the day spent by working accounted for the largest proportion in former year.Whereas, going out with friends represented the lowest proportion in latter year.
To begin with,it is clear that according to pie charts In 1958 in six sections and working accounted for 33% the largest proportion and sleeping recorded 32% in 1958 .While, the proportion of travelling to work stood at 19% and travelling to work represented the lowest share at 2%.The major changed was relaxing at home 8% in 1958 but in 2008 was 5% increased stood at 13% day spent by working adults. In addition,32% recorded for largest proportion in 1958.
Furthermore, The major changed was relaxing at home 8% in 1958 but in 2008 was 5% increased stood at 13% day spent by working adults. In addition,32% recorded for largest proportion in 1958.In contrast , the proportion was 2008 in sleeping and working accounted for 25% and 42%day spent by working youth generations respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the pie charts, but the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the student states that 'working accounted for 33%' in 1958, but the data is not clearly linked to the visual evidence. There is significant confusion in the reporting of figures, and some data points are repeated or contradictory (e.g., mentioning 32% as the largest proportion twice). The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the main trends, such as the shift in working hours or sleeping patterns. The response fails to clearly compare the two years, leading to a lack of clarity in the overall message.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'In addition' are used, they are often placed awkwardly or do not logically connect the sentences. The referencing is frequently unclear, such as the phrase 'the major changed was relaxing at home', which is repeated almost verbatim in the second paragraph. The lack of logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic phrasing. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'particular nations' instead of 'a particular country' and 'youth generations' to describe working adults. The student struggles to use precise terminology for describing data, often using 'proportion' or 'share' incorrectly. Phrases like 'the major changed was' indicate a lack of control over basic descriptive language. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the major changed was relaxing', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'the proportion was 2008 in sleeping'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The student relies on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the proportion of the day spent by working accounted for the largest proportion in former year'. These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader.
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