Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The information about working adults in a particular country spend their time in 1958 and 2008 has been illustrated by the assigned pie chart.
Overall it is vivid from the mention pie chart,the maximum percentage of day spend bt working adults on different activities was in working,while minimum in travelling to work .
As can be observed, In 1958, the proportion of the day spend bt working adults on various activities in going out with friends/ family was 19%,while 2% was in travelling to work. However, the percentage of sleeping was 32% for farmer and 8% in relaxing at home. Besidethis, only 33 % was in working.
Additionally, In 2008,the percentage of day spend by working adults on various activities in playing sports and travelling to work was similar. Moreover, A minor dispensary could be noticed in going out with friends/ family and Sleeping to be priece; by the entire data ranging to 7% and 25%. Furthermore, the proportion of the day spend by working adults on various activities in relaxing at home was 13% as compared to working was 42%,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The information is often confusing; for example, the mention of 'farmer' in the 1958 data is not supported by the prompt, and the comparison of figures is inaccurate. The report lacks a logical selection of data, and the description of the 2008 data is particularly unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes (e.g., the increase in working hours) and ensure the data cited matches the provided charts exactly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'Additionally' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are often placed awkwardly or used to introduce information that does not follow a logical progression. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the internal structure of the sentences makes it difficult to track the comparison between the two years. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the readability of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'dispensary' instead of 'discrepancy' and 'priece' instead of 'precise'. The phrase 'vivid from the mention pie chart' is unnatural. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data with precision, relying heavily on repetitive structures. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more accurate terminology for describing trends, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', or 'significant increase', and ensure that spelling is checked carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'adults... spend their time' should be 'spends' or the sentence structure needs adjustment) and preposition usage. Sentence structures are often repetitive and lack complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like verb tense consistency and article usage.
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