Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are two pie charts that show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

There is a difference of half century (50 years) between 1958 to 2008.

In 1958 and 20008 charts , adults spend there most of the time on working. There percentage is 33% and in 2008 there percentage is increased that is 42%.But in sleeping the chart show 7 percent decreased in 2008 and in 1958 the sleeping percentage is 32 and in 2008 the percentage is 25.

In travelling to work the percentage of1958 and 2008 is increased from 2% to 7%.

Going out with friends and family of 2008 is less in percent as compared to 1958 which is 19% to 6%.

Last but not the least relaxing at home is 5% increased from 1958.

and the final playing sports in 6% in 1958 and 7% in 2008..

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the two pie charts. However, the analysis is quite superficial and lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. While you have included specific data points, such as the increase in working time from 33% to 42%, the report reads more like a list of individual observations rather than a cohesive summary. To improve, you should group the data more effectively—for example, by highlighting the most significant changes or categories that remained stable. The lack of a clear introductory overview prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into short, fragmented paragraphs, which makes the flow of information feel disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for instance, the transition between the discussion of working hours and sleeping hours is abrupt. While you use some basic connectors like 'but' and 'in 1958', the overall structure lacks logical progression. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and use linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to guide the reader through your comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'percentage' and 'is' to describe data, which makes the writing feel monotonous. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'There percentage is 33%' (should be 'Their percentage' or 'The figure for this was 33%') and 'the chart show 7 percent decreased' (should be 'a 7 percent decrease'). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'accounted for', 'witnessed', 'experienced', and 'a significant rise'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the chart show'), incorrect pronoun usage ('there' instead of 'their'), and awkward sentence structures ('There is a difference of half century'). The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on using more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or comparative structures (e.g., 'While working hours increased, the time spent sleeping saw a decline'). Proofreading for basic errors like article usage and verb tense consistency is essential.

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