Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrate how working adults in a particular country allocated their time across different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall,it is clear that working become a more dominant activity in 2008,while time spent sleeping and socializing decreased.Additionally,activites such as traveling to work and playing sports occupied a larger proportion in 2008 as compare to 1958.

In 1958,sleeping accounted for the largest share of time at 32%,closely followed by working at 33%. Going out with friends and family made up at19% of the day, while relaxing at home and traveling to work shown 8% and 2% respectively. Only a small proportion of time was spent in other activities.

By contrast , in 2008 , working become the most significant activity, rising to 42% of the day. Meanwhile,sleeping declined considerably to 25%. Relaxing at home increased to 13%, whereas time spent socialising dropped to just 6%. Traveling to work show a noticeable increase to 7%, and playing sports as a new category, accounting for 7% of daily time.

In conclusion, over the 50 year period, working hours increase sustainably, while other socializing activities decrease respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task. You have identified the main features and provided a clear overview of the trends between 1958 and 2008. The comparisons are relevant, such as noting the rise in working hours and the decline in sleep. However, there is a minor factual error in your data reporting: you stated that in 1958, sleeping was 32% and working was 33%, but the prompt implies these figures should be carefully checked against the visual data. Overall, the information is well-selected and the key trends are highlighted effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Meanwhile' to guide the reader. However, there are some issues with punctuation and spacing, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Overall,it', 'contrast , in 2008 ,'). Improving the mechanical control of these cohesive markers would enhance the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods, which helps the reader follow the comparison.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'allocated', 'dominant', 'proportion', and 'significant'. There are some minor errors in word choice and form, such as 'working become' instead of 'working became' and 'increase sustainably' instead of 'increased substantially'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring correct word forms when describing trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'The pie chart illustrate' (should be 'illustrates') and 'working hours increase' (should be 'increased'). Additionally, there are frequent punctuation errors, specifically missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these recurring errors in basic grammar and punctuation limit the score. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and punctuation would significantly improve your accuracy.

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