Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates that how adults employer in a specific country pass their time in the era 1958 and 2008.

After analysing the pie chart we conclude that as the time change in 2008 working percentage escalated about 9%.furthermore relaxing at home is about 5%.whereas sleeping percentage shows decline in 2008 .it remained only quarter in 2008.

The pie chart further collates, that playing sports is almost negligible in the era 1958 however it was 7%in 2008 .in addition there was about 2%of adults preferred to travel to work however it was 5%more in 2008.Despite that there was 19%were prefer to going out with friends and family on the other hand it was about 6% in 2008

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data reporting is inconsistent; for instance, you mention 'sleeping percentage shows decline' but do not provide the specific figures to support this. Furthermore, the comparison between 1958 and 2008 is fragmented. To improve, ensure you include a clear introductory summary, group related data logically, and provide precise data points for all categories mentioned to ensure the task is fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, with the second paragraph containing a jumble of disparate points. While you use some cohesive devices like 'furthermore' and 'in addition', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'Despite that there was 19% were prefer'. The progression of ideas is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. To improve, focus on organizing your response into a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs that group data by theme or trend.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'adults employer' (should be 'employed adults') and 'collates' (used incorrectly to mean 'shows' or 'illustrates') demonstrate a lack of precision. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations, such as 'playing sports is almost negligible'. The repetition of 'in 2008' and 'in the era 1958' indicates a restricted range. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider variety of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and ensure words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that impede clarity. Examples include 'illustrates that how adults employer', 'as the time change', and '19% were prefer to going out'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and inconsistent capitalization. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and basic sentence construction. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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