Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts under depicts the time spent by youngsters in 6 fields during 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is evident that adults utilize their most of time in working in both years, while sleeping showed a downward activity choose by peoples.

At first glance, it is clear that in 1958, working was highly preferred choice among youngsters that was 33%, whereas this figure show a significantly increased in 2008 and reached up to 42%. Furthermore, sleeping was choose around 32% in 1958 and 25% in 2008 which were decreased.

Looking at the remaining details, playing sports remained the same in both years at around 7%. Furthermore, adults spent 19% of their time going out with family and friends in 1958, while this figure notably declined and remained to 6% in 2008. Meanwhile, some adults show interest in relaxing at home and the proportion was 8% and 13% in 1958 and 2008 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons. You successfully identified the key trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decline in time spent with family. However, there are some inaccuracies in your interpretation of the data. For example, you refer to the subjects as 'youngsters', whereas the prompt specifies 'working adults'. Additionally, the statement that 'sleeping showed a downward activity' is slightly imprecise as it refers to the percentage of time allocated to that activity. To improve, ensure you strictly adhere to the terminology provided in the prompt and focus on reporting the data points more precisely to support your overview.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the data. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'At first glance', and 'Meanwhile' to connect ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'remained to 6%', which is not standard usage. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring they are used in the correct context would help improve the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of unnatural word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'sleeping was choose' should be 'sleeping was chosen' or 'time spent sleeping'. The phrase 'downward activity choose by peoples' is grammatically and lexically incorrect. You also use 'youngsters' instead of 'adults', which is a significant error in task interpretation. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word forms (e.g., noun vs. verb) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'The pie charts under depicts' (subject-verb agreement error), 'this figure show a significantly increased' (incorrect verb form), and 'remained to 6%' (incorrect preposition). While the meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in tense, word form, and preposition usage limit the score. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data.

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