Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts displays comparision baout how a day is spent by working individuals in a nation during the year 1958 and 2008. Looking at the data, it is readily apparent that people usually spent majority of their time working and sleeping in both timeline.
In 1958, citizen mostly choose working (33%) as their priority. In contrast, working holds highest share in 2008 at 42%. Moreover, similar pattern is followed by relaxing at home(8%) and travelling to work(2%) during 1958 ,which increased significantly at 13% and 7% respectively in the year 2008. Furthermore, Going out with friends and family in nineteenth century was 19%, but seen downward pattern in 2008 at 6%.
Sleeping is accounted for second largest share 32% in 1958, which declined marginally to 25%. Additionally, playing sports shoe
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student has addressed the task by summarizing how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008. They identified key data points, such as time spent working, sleeping, and other activities. However, the comparison between the two years lacks clarity and depth, and some details, such as the total percentages, are missing. The response needs to present a clearer overview of the changes without relying heavily on specific figures alone, which would improve the overall coherence of the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response presents some coherence, with logical structuring of information; however, it would benefit from clearer connections between sentences and ideas. Phrases like "In contrast" and "Moreover" help create a flow, but transitioning between ideas could be more nuanced. Additionally, the narrative could be more unified by consistently linking changes in activities to an overarching trend, such as a shift in work-life balance over the years. Introducing comparative phrases could help in making the comparisons stronger and clearer.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical resource used in the response is basic and includes some informal phrases. Words like "majority," "priority," and "significantly" were an attempt to discuss the data, but the overall vocabulary could be improved for a higher band score. Mistakes, such as "comparision baout" and the mislabel of 'ninteenth century' instead of '2008', show a lack of variety and precision. Greater use of synonyms and more formal language would enhance the response considerably.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range and accuracy are limited, featuring several grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement issues ("displays comparision" should be "display") and misuse of tenses (e.g. "in nineteenth century was 19% but seen downward pattern" should be revised). These errors sometimes impede clarity. The response contains incomplete sentences and phrases that do not convey clear meaning, such as "playing sports shoe" which is cut off. Working on fully developed sentences with correct punctuation would strengthen the clarity of ideas presented.
Overall feedback
The response identifies key data points from the pie charts and provides an overview of how working adults spent their time in 1958 and 2008. You have made comparisons, but specificity in changes over time is often unclear. Improving these comparisons by including overall trends would enhance your task achievement. Linguistically, the piece suffers from grammatical inaccuracies and a simplistic vocabulary which limits your band. Focus on using a wider range of vocabulary and correcting grammatical mistakes, such as ensuring proper subject-verb agreement and using full sentences. Practicing cohesive ties could also improve the flow of your writing, making your ideas clearer.
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