Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts illustrate a comparison between the time spent on five categories of activities among working adults in a particular country in the years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working takes the highest proportion in both years marking the peak value in the charts. On the other hand, spending leisure time going out with friends and family accounts for the lowest proportion among all the activities present in the data.

It is evident that the adults followed a similar trend in the working sector increasing from 33% to 42% in the duration of 50 years. The proportions for relaxing at home and travelling to work followed a similar increase of 5%. On the contrary, nocturnal activities mark a substantial decrease of 7 percent over the years. Physical activities such as sports as mentioned in the chart remained consistent in both years.

However, the act of spending quality time with family and friends faced a significant decrease of 13 percent which accounts for the lowest recorded figure calculated according to the charts given.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features and provided relevant comparisons between the two years. You covered all categories mentioned in the charts and highlighted key trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in nocturnal activities. However, the report could be improved by including more precise data points to support your observations. For instance, when mentioning the increase in 'relaxing at home', stating the specific percentages (e.g., from 8% to 13%) would provide a clearer picture for the reader. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task well by providing a clear summary and a logical overview of the data provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

Your writing is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand', 'It is evident that', and 'On the contrary' to guide the reader through your analysis. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed findings. To reach a higher band, ensure that your transitions between sentences are even smoother and avoid slightly repetitive phrasing when introducing new points. The progression of ideas is clear, and the information is presented in a way that is easy to follow throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas clearly, using terms like 'proportion', 'substantial decrease', and 'consistent'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, which is appropriate for an academic task. However, there are minor issues with word choice, such as 'nocturnal activities' to describe sleep, which is slightly imprecise in this context. Additionally, phrases like 'marking the peak value' are functional but could be more sophisticated. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations related to data description, such as 'accounted for' or 'represented a significant shift'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. Most of your sentences are clear and error-free, allowing for easy communication. There are a few minor grammatical slips, such as 'in the duration of 50 years' (better: 'over a 50-year period') and 'as mentioned in the chart' (which is slightly redundant). Your control of punctuation is generally good, and your verb tenses are consistent with the requirements of describing past data. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to enhance the sophistication of your writing.

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