Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given pie charts shows the percentage of working adults spending their full time in the various activities from morning to night and compares the activities of working individuals from 1958 AD with 2008 AD.

As we talk about the working time between two given periods, it is shown that 33% of working adults were working during 1958 AD while in 2008 AD, 42% of working adults were working during the period. It shows that the working time period has been drastically changed in 50 years of time period.

Similarly, we can notice that about 19% of the working adults had been involved in going out with friends and family during leisure time during 1958 AD while in 2008 AD, it reduced to 6

% of working adults decreased by 13% over the 50 years of time period.

Similarly, it is given that the % of working adults travelled to work has been in increasing state from 1958 to 2008 AD from 2% to 7% respectively.

Similarly, in 1958 AD, The percentage of the day spent by working adults for sleeping is 32% while in 2008 it reduced to 25% which is not a good sign of healthy lifestyle. The working adults working for more time and sleeping for less will cause Dementia or insomnia for most of the individuals in longer period of time.

The given pie-chart also shows that the working adults spend their 8% of the day for relaxing at home in 1958 AD which is a good for overall work life balance where as in 2008 AD, it is increased by 5% which is quite quality time spent by the working adults.

In the mean time, the pie chart also shows that in 1958 AD, there is no working adults spend their time in the Sports activities. They mostly spend their day working, spending time with friends and family, tra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a cohesive summary of the main trends. While you identify some data points, the analysis is inconsistent. Crucially, you include personal opinions, such as stating that reduced sleep is 'not a good sign of a healthy lifestyle' and speculating about 'Dementia or insomnia.' In IELTS Task 1, you must remain objective and avoid adding external knowledge or subjective commentary. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full overview of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses 'Similarly' as a repetitive, mechanical transition at the start of almost every paragraph, which hinders the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is present but the logical progression is weak because the information is presented as a list of facts rather than a comparative analysis. The abrupt ending of the text significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final paragraph is left unfinished. To improve, you should use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Conversely,' 'Furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'working time period has been drastically changed' and 'in increasing state.' There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'no working adults spend their time in the Sports activities.' To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'accounted for,' and avoid repetitive structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The given pie charts shows'), incorrect preposition usage ('in 1958 AD' instead of 'in 1958'), and awkward phrasing ('no working adults spend their time'). While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors that occasionally impede clarity. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring consistent tense usage when describing historical data. The incomplete final sentence also negatively affects the grammatical structure of the conclusion.

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