Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the pie chart illustrates how working adults in a specific country expenditure their time in 1958 and 2008.
In 1958 the percentage of the day expenditure by working adults on various activities, In the below pie diagram they were discussed various items, If we go on working they spent 33% it was the highest amount they spent and also they spent on sleeping nearly 32%. In additionally they spent very least amount in the Travelling to work approximately 2% and similarily the spent very little amount in the Relaxing at home.
In 2008 working employees were spent nearly 42% it is very highest amount regarding all the expenditure of the pie chart and also they spent 25% in sleeping and coming to they spent equally amount in the playing sports and travelling work approximately 7% and the least spending in the going out with friends/family.
when we compare both the pie charts in the year of 1958 and 2008 they spent nearly half of the amount in the working and remaining amount in the various activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is superficial. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the comparison between 1958 and 2008 lacks depth. For instance, you mention that working time increased from 33% to 42%, but you fail to highlight the significant shifts in other categories, such as the decrease in sleeping time or the changes in leisure activities. The overview is also weak; stating that they 'spent nearly half of the amount in the working' is factually inaccurate based on the data provided. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear, accurate summary of the trends rather than just listing percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. You rely heavily on simple connectors like 'and also' or 'in additionally' (which is grammatically incorrect). The transition between sentences is often mechanical, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to show the relationship between the data points. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as one for 1958 and one for 2008, followed by a clear comparison.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use the word 'expenditure' incorrectly; it is a noun referring to the act of spending money, not time. Using 'highest amount' repeatedly to describe percentages is also imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'coming to they spent equally amount', which makes the meaning difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'allocated', 'witnessed a rise', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will help you communicate your observations more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. You struggle with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'working employees were spent' and 'they spent equally amount'. Sentence structures are largely simple, and there is a lack of complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with commas used incorrectly or missing in key places. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones. Pay close attention to the correct use of passive voice (e.g., 'time was spent') and ensure that your verb forms are consistent when discussing past data.
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