Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrate that how adults work in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, adults of 2008 has much better spent their time compare to the 1958 adults.
Looking at the data in more detail, the sleeping time of adults in 1958 has 32% while adults of 2008 has 25% of time they spent. The adults who use to relax at home in 1958 has 8% , but the adults of 2008 has 13% of relax at home. In the 1958 the adults use to work for 33% and the adults has grew their work at 42% in 2008.
Regarding the remaining figure, the adults who use to travel to work is 2% while other adults climbed at 42% in 2008. Then the adults who use to spent their time with family and friends used 19% in 1958, and 6% of spending time with their friends and family in 2008. The next is the adults who play sports has use their time with 7% in 2008. As a result the adults of 2008 has higher than the 1958,while they has the lowest spent their time in 1958.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying main features, such as the increase in work hours and the decrease in sleep. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you state that 'other adults climbed at 42% in 2008', which is unclear and likely misinterprets the data. Additionally, the summary statement 'adults of 2008 has much better spent their time' is subjective and not supported by the data provided. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the percentages from the charts and avoid making value judgments about whether one year's time allocation is 'better' than another.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between sentences is often mechanical, relying on simple connectors like 'Then' or 'The next is'. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly, and the referencing is sometimes confusing, such as in the final sentence where the comparison between 1958 and 2008 is unclear. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, making the report feel like a list of disconnected statistics rather than a cohesive summary of trends.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use 'adults' and 'spent their time' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'climbed at 42%' and 'has grew their work'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'rose', 'surged') and 'decrease' (e.g., 'declined', 'dropped'), and ensure that your collocations are accurate for describing statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, particularly with subject-verb agreement and tense usage. Examples include 'The pie chart illustrate', 'adults of 2008 has', and 'adults use to work'. These errors are persistent and sometimes make the sentences difficult to follow. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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