Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
These pie charts illustrate the change in the proportion of several activities adulds perform in their daily life from 1958 to 2008.
Overall working is the most prevalent one in both charts, but its fraction has increased with time. However, travelling for work has been the least popular activity, wheather its percentage has increased by 2008. Going out with family and friends has dropped dramatically during this time period.
In 1958 working was the most prominent activity with an account of 33% and it has increased to 42% in 2008 and remained the dominent among all other activities. Sleeping was the second most performed activity with the fraction of 32% in 1958, although it has dropped to 25% in 2008 but still maintained its second position in the overall stats. Going out with friends and family has dropped dramatically over this period of time from 19% to 6% only. Furthermore, relaxing at home was around 8% in 1958 and rose to 13% by the year 2008. The least popular activity which was travelling for work was accounting for of 2% only in 1958 has grown to 7% in 2008. In 2008 the total proportion of those who participate in sports was also 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. The overview is clear, identifying the main trends such as the increase in working time and the decline in social activities. However, the report could be improved by grouping the data more logically rather than listing each category in isolation. For instance, categorizing activities by those that increased versus those that decreased would provide a more analytical approach. The data is accurately reported, and the comparison between the two years is consistent throughout the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'however', 'furthermore', and 'although' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more refined to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis more effectively. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by varying the sentence structure to avoid repetitive phrasing, such as starting multiple sentences with 'In 1958' or 'In 2008'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe trends and proportions clearly. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, such as 'prevalent', 'prominent', and 'dominant'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'with an account of 33%' (should be 'accounting for 33%') and 'wheather' (spelling error for 'whether'). The phrase 'remained the dominent among all other activities' is slightly awkward. Improving the precision of these collocations would elevate the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'adulds' (spelling), 'wheather its percentage has increased' (incorrect usage of 'whether'), and 'accounting for of 2%'. There are also minor punctuation and preposition errors throughout. The control of complex structures is inconsistent, and while the errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and prepositional accuracy would be beneficial.
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