Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The Proportion of different activities, which are performed by the individuals having jobs in a 24 hours of a day of a particular nation are compared by two pie charts in 1958 and 2008.
Howover, proportion of all activities are changed in 2008 but most significant drop has occurred in hang out activity with freinds and family, and sleeping, while percentage of remaining all activities increased in 2008.
First of all, the working hours are significanlty increased form 32% to 42% in 1958 and 2008 respectively. Moreover, the rest time, Travelling time to work, playing sports also shown a climb. These activities were contributing 13%, 7% and again 7% respectively in 2008, while, these percentages were 8%, 2% and 4% respectively in 1958.
On contrary, the sleeping time and going out with freinds or family are droped from 32% to 25% and 19% to 6% respectively in year 1958 and 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by comparing the two pie charts. It identifies the main features, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in sleeping and socialising. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; for example, it states that 'most significant drop has occurred in hang out activity', whereas the data shows a larger percentage point drop in sleeping (from 32% to 25% is a 7-point drop, but the socialising drop from 19% to 6% is a 13-point drop). Additionally, the data interpretation is occasionally confusing, such as stating working hours increased from 32% to 42% 'in 1958 and 2008 respectively', which is clear, but the overall analysis lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Moreover', and 'On contrary'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'On contrary' (should be 'On the contrary') and 'Howover' (spelling error). The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the referencing of data points could be smoother to improve the flow between sentences. Paragraphing is present, but the structure of the overview paragraph is a bit disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'Howover', 'significanlty', 'freinds', and 'droped'. The student relies on basic verbs like 'increased', 'shown a climb', and 'droped'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated collocations or varied synonyms limits the score. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'witnessed a significant rise' or 'experienced a marked decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'The Proportion of different activities, which are performed by the individuals having jobs in a 24 hours of a day', which is clunky and contains article errors. Other issues include 'these percentages were 8%, 2% and 4% respectively in 1958', where the phrasing is repetitive. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity and professional tone of the report.
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