Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This pie chart show that how working adults in particular country spent their time in 1958 to 2008 The pie chart show the percentage of day spent by working adults on various activities
Overall, in 1958 adults spent their more time with their family and friends they spend more time in outing and outdoor activities with family they spend 2 percent of their time in traveling for business work adults spent 32 percent of their time in sleeping ant relaxing as compare to rate of 2008 adult spent travelling 7 percent the rate of traveling work increase 5 percent in 2008 going out with family and friends decrease in 2008 the rate of working adults is more in 1958 as compare to 2008 almost 11 decrease in 2008
The percentage of adults sleeping in 1958 is less then the rate of sleeping in 2008 . rate of relaxing in increase in 2008 about to 5 percent
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to follow the comparisons between 1958 and 2008. Several statements are inaccurate or lack the necessary precision required for a data-driven task. For example, the claim that 'the rate of working adults is more in 1958' is vague and does not clearly reference the specific categories provided in the charts. To improve, you must group data logically and ensure that all comparisons are supported by clear, accurate figures from the diagrams.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the transition between ideas is abrupt. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, relying on repetitive sentence structures rather than linking words or phrases that would help the reader follow the progression of information. For instance, the text jumps between different categories without clear signposting. To achieve a higher band, you should organize your response into a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, using a variety of linking words to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, often relying on the same words throughout the text (e.g., 'rate', 'time', 'spent'). There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'rate of relaxing in increase' and 'as compare to'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a decline', or 'remained stable', and ensure you use these terms in the correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('This pie chart show'), missing articles, and incorrect preposition usage ('as compare to'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing full stops and capitalization errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex structures like relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to add variety to your writing.
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