Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie charts indicates how working adults in a particular county spent their time in 1958 and 2008
I am summarise the informaion from the pie chart
first of all in 1958 percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities
19 percent adults going with family and friends for relaxing our mind and enjoy the time with her friends and family
and 2 percent adults travelling to work every morning and 33 percent adults were sleeping and 33 present doing her works like jobs at the and some adults relaxing at home
In 2008 percentage of the adults day spent working on various activities 7 present playing sports and 6 present going out with friend and family And 7 present people travelling to work
25 percent were sleeping and 15 percent relaxing at home and 42 percent people doing her works and jobs its means working
From the both pie charts shows 1958 people working less and in 2008 people working means jobs increase
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to provide a clear overview or a structured summary of the main trends. The data presentation is fragmented and contains significant inaccuracies compared to the provided charts (e.g., misidentifying percentages and activities). The response lacks a clear analytical focus, instead listing data points in a disjointed manner. To improve, you must identify the most significant changes between 1958 and 2008, such as the increase in working hours or the decrease in sleep, and present these as a cohesive comparison rather than a simple list of figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and paragraphing. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. The use of cohesive devices is extremely limited, with sentences often starting abruptly or being linked by repetitive 'and' connectors. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the information is not grouped by category or time period effectively. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks to separate your overview from your detailed analysis and employ a wider range of linking words such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'whereas' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple verbs and nouns. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'present' instead of 'percent', and 'her works' instead of 'their work'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the data with precision. To improve, focus on learning specific terminology for describing charts, such as 'accounted for', 'witnessed a rise', 'remained stable', and 'proportion'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for percentages and time-related comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'pie charts indicates'), incorrect pronoun usage ('her works'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and often incomplete or run-on. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which is necessary for higher bands. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles and prepositions correctly. Proofreading for basic errors like 'present' vs 'percent' is essential.
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