Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrate proportion of activities performed by an adult in a particular country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, In the both figure adults spent most of his time working, however in the recent figure the working time has increased significantly. previously, going out with friend or family consume huge proportion of time, but in recent figure it decreased dramatically.
In 1958, working cover 33% of proportion of chart, but, In 2008 , it convers 42% , which is 9% hike in working time. Similarly, playing sport has also increase marginally for an working adults. Additionally, relaxing at home has also increased significantly from 8% to 13%.
On contrast, sleeping has decreased from 32% to 25% over the period. Following it, going out with friend and family has fallen dramatically. previously, it was 19% in 1958, but , In 2008, its 6% just below sports. however, there is huge improvement in traveling, In 1958, it was 2%, but, In 2008 it grew till 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data and provides a clear overview. You successfully identified the key trends, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in time spent sleeping and socializing. However, the report could be improved by ensuring more accurate data representation; for instance, you mentioned a '9% hike' in working time, which is a good analytical step, but ensure all comparisons are precise. The overview is present but could be more integrated into the structure. Overall, you have addressed the requirements of the task well by selecting and reporting the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Similarly', 'On contrast', and 'Following it' to link sentences. However, some of these transitions are used slightly awkwardly or with incorrect punctuation (e.g., 'On contrast' should be 'In contrast'). Additionally, the referencing is sometimes repetitive, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring correct punctuation would elevate the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'significantly', 'dramatically', and 'marginally'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'convers 42%' instead of 'accounts for 42%' and 'grew till 7%' instead of 'rose to 7%'. There are also minor spelling and capitalization errors throughout the text (e.g., 'In the both figure'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring consistent accuracy in word choice.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('The pie chart illustrate', 'working cover 33%') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and capitalization issues (e.g., 'In 1958, working cover... but, In 2008 , it convers'). While these errors do not prevent communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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