Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There are two pie charts illustrating the difference between time distribution of working adults in 1958 and 2008.

There has been lots of changes in regard of time consumption by working adults ranging from 1958 to 2008 which shows rise and fall in different aspects of their activities.

In 1958 most of their time was utilized by working that is 33% that slightly increased in 2008 which is 42%.

Along with a slight increase in relaxing at home that was 8% in 1958 to 13% in 2008.

On the other hand all other activities are seen to be declined from their previous percentages like sleeping that was 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008.Also there has been decline in going out with friends/family and travelling to work from 19% to 7% and 7% to 2% respectively.

Only playing sports has been almost constant with 7% from 1958 to 2008.

As the final conclusion the time spent by young adults have been changed from 1958 to 2008 in different activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the pie charts, including the most significant changes over the 50-year period. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with relevant data. However, the response lacks a clear structure; it is written as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure you group related data points more logically—for example, grouping the activities that increased versus those that decreased—and provide a more analytical comparison rather than just listing the figures. The conclusion is also somewhat redundant as it simply restates the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear, logical progression of ideas in IELTS Task 1. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'Along with', the overall flow is somewhat mechanical. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the lack of clear paragraph breaks makes the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use separate paragraphs for the introduction/overview, the main trends, and the specific comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'time distribution' and 'time consumption'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'lots of changes' and 'rise and fall' are quite basic. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary, such as 'fluctuations', 'significant shift', or 'remained stable', and ensure your collocations are natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'There has been lots of changes' should be 'There have been many changes', and 'in regard of' is non-standard; 'with regard to' would be more appropriate. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'utilized by working'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency of your writing.

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