Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrate how working adults in a particular nation in percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities between 1958 and 2008.
Overall,it can be seen that the according to the pie chart working accounted for largest proportion in former year.While,travelling to work represented the lowest proportion .Whereas ,in latter year in working accounted for the largest proportion and playing sports and travelling to work recorded for lowest share by working youth generation also various activities.
To begin with,it is clear that the working accounted for largest proportion of the overall figure .The day spent by working youth on various activities in six type of leisure activities.At firstly,in 1958 in three type of activities also decline.The proportion of travelling to work,relaxing at home and playing sports accounted for 2%,8% and 6% in youth on various activities.In addition,sleeping recorded for the significant share at 32%, working also same as but 1% increased.
Furthermore,it is clear that In 2008 in working accounted for the largest proportion and going out with friends represented the lowest share at 6%.Whereas,the major trend was playing sports and travelling to work as a same in 2008.The proportion 7% and 7% but relaxing at home was increased in 20008 in at 13%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by comparing the two pie charts, but the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the student claims 'working accounted for largest proportion' in both years, but the data shows sleeping was the largest category in both 1958 and 2008. Furthermore, the mention of 'working youth generation' is an incorrect interpretation of the data, which refers to 'working adults'. The summary of trends is disjointed, and the lack of clear, accurate data reporting makes it difficult to follow the main features of the charts. The response fails to clearly highlight the significant shifts, such as the increase in leisure time or the decrease in working hours.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'At firstly' and 'Whereas' used at the start of sentences where they do not fit logically. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly when discussing the data points. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the overall summary is disjointed, making the text feel like a collection of loosely related sentences rather than a cohesive report. The punctuation is also problematic, with many missing spaces after commas and periods, which further hinders the flow of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing such as 'accounted for largest proportion' and 'recorded for lowest share'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'recorded for' instead of 'accounted for' or 'represented', and the misuse of 'youth generation' instead of 'working adults'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or comparisons with any precision. Spelling errors, such as '20008', and awkward phrasing throughout the text indicate a limited control over lexical items required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For instance, 'working accounted for largest proportion' lacks necessary articles, and 'the major trend was playing sports and travelling to work as a same' is grammatically incorrect. The student attempts some complex structures, but these are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also a significant issue, with many missing spaces after punctuation marks, which makes the text difficult to read. The majority of sentences contain errors, limiting the range and accuracy.
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