Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of activities done by employed adults to spent the day in a certain country between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, from the charts, it is evident that working adults spent most of their time by working. Followed by sleeping which is the second most popular activity. The charts reveal that going out with friends significantly dropped and relaxing at home gained popularity over the given period while, playing sports remained unchanged.

The pie charts demonstrate working is by far the most spent activity for working adults accounting for 33 percent in 1958 and increased to 42 percent in 2008. Second most popular activity, sleeping accounted for 32 percent in 1958 which then fell slightly to 25 percent in 2008. It is clear that 19% share that accounted for going out with family in 1958 fell dramatically and account for just 6% in the year 2008.

Pie charts also show that relaxing at home activity gained popularity accounting for 8 percent and 13 percent respectively between 1958 and 2008. In addition, traveling to work increased from 2 percent in 1958 to 7 percent in 2008. Finally, playing sports remained unchanged with contributing to 7 percent share in both period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features and provided relevant comparisons between the two years. The overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decline in social activities. You have included data to support your points, which is essential for Task 1. However, to reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurate and avoid minor inaccuracies in reporting, such as the slight confusion in the phrasing of 'going out with family' versus 'friends'. Overall, the response covers all parts of the task well and provides a clear summary of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs that group information effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Finally', and 'It is clear that' to guide the reader through the data. While the flow is generally good, some transitions between sentences feel slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately, which helps the reader follow the comparison of data over time.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'gained popularity'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are occasional errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'most spent activity' (should be 'most time-consuming activity') and 'contributing to 7 percent share' (which is slightly awkward). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your collocations are natural. The current vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist, such as 'proportion of activities done by employed adults to spent the day' (should be 'to spend') and 'account for just 6%' (should be 'accounted for'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and tense inconsistencies. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past data will help improve your accuracy.

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