Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Pie charts illustrates the reasons how working adults spend their day by working on various activities.
Overall, In 1958 working has a huge proportion contribution of 33% whereas second most common proportion of sleeping 32%. While going out with friends and family has a ratio of 19% only. The least contribution in adults activities was relaxing at home and travelling work 8% and 2% respectively.
In Comparison, in 2008 same pattern follows as in 1958, Working has a huge portion of contribution in daily activities about 42%. where sleeping was considered to be a second highest proportion attribution in a daily activities of adults. whereas relaxing at home and playing sports are less common in 2008 about 13% and 7%. While going out with friends and family and and travelling to work is the least contributed activity.
In the summary, Working is the highest attribution proportion recorded in the both pie charts, Whereas the lowest attribution was recorded was relaxing at home, travelling to work, playing sports and going out with friends and family.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features of the charts, such as the dominance of working and sleeping. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For example, you state that 'going out with friends and family' was 19% in 1958, but the data provided in the prompt (if viewed as a standard chart) would likely show different figures. Furthermore, the summary paragraph is vague and fails to synthesize the key trends effectively, such as the shift in time allocation over the 50-year period. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data points and provide a clearer overview of the most significant changes between the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as starting a paragraph with 'In Comparison, in 2008 same pattern follows'. The referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'conversely', 'in contrast') more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and limited. You frequently use the word 'proportion' and 'contribution' in ways that are not always collocationally accurate, such as 'huge proportion contribution'. There are also instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'second highest proportion attribution'. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary by using synonyms and more precise terms for describing data, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'a significant share'. Additionally, ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The Pie charts illustrates') and missing articles ('travelling to work is the least contributed activity'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'where sleeping was considered to be a second highest proportion attribution in a daily activities of adults'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation limits the clarity of your writing. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement.
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