Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given pie chart shows that adult in countries spent their time in 1958 and 2008 mostly in working . Overall 33% person in 1958 work while 32% spent sleeping similarly, In 2008 adults 42% work that is average but 25% spent sleeping . There are also some activities in 1958 people do in that most lesser is travelling for work but in 2008 less thing people do is going out with friends and family the reason people do this in 2008 is because they are more into work large amount of people work so they can't get time to go out . After working less amount of adults can found is sleeping if people work they need sleep . travelling for work is 7% that is relatively same to playing sports but in 1958 going out with friends is in more amount as compare to travelling for work , relaxing at home and playing sports .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by comparing the two pie charts, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main trends. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, and the analysis is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., stating 42% is 'average'). The student struggles to select and report the most significant features, instead focusing on minor details or making unsupported inferences about why people work more in 2008. The lack of a clear structure makes it difficult to follow the comparison between the two years, resulting in a response that only partially addresses the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single block of text. There is no logical progression of ideas; the transition between the 1958 data and the 2008 data is abrupt and confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the misuse of 'similarly' and 'after working'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to identify which data point the student is referring to. The overall arrangement is disjointed, which significantly hinders the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'work', 'spent', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'most lesser is travelling' and 'less thing people do'. The student struggles to use precise language to describe statistical data or trends. While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of variety and the frequent inaccuracies in word usage prevent the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient only for the most basic communication of the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('adult in countries spent'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes them difficult to parse. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures, with almost no attempt at complex sentences. Errors are pervasive and often impede the clarity of the information being presented. The frequent misuse of prepositions and verb tenses further detracts from the overall accuracy of the writing.

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