Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrate how working adults spent their time in a particular country in 1958 and 2000.
Overall, in both the years adults used to work more rather then spending least time hanging up with peers and travelling to work.
Heading to detail, in 2008, percentage of adults spending time with family and friends was decreased around 6%, whereas it was 19% in 1958. Moreover, brats playing sports has remained same in both the years. Furthermore, mature individuals who travel to work is 2% in 1958 which increased to 7% in 2008.
On the other hand, there is a downfall in percentile of sleeping which is around 32% to 13%. In 2008 people use to relax at home rather than people in 1958. Furthermore there is significant rise in the people who often use to work in 1958 and 2008 which is 33% to 40% according to the chart.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. There are significant issues with data interpretation; for instance, you state that time spent with family and friends decreased by 6%, but the data provided in the prompt (if analyzed correctly) would show different trends. Furthermore, the use of informal language like 'brats' is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. The overview provided is vague and does not effectively highlight the most significant trends or differences between the two years. To improve, focus on accurately reporting the figures and identifying the most striking changes, such as the shift in work hours or sleep patterns, while maintaining a formal, objective tone.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and unclear referencing. Phrases like 'Heading to detail' are not standard academic signposting. While you use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', they are often used mechanically and do not always connect ideas logically. The progression of information feels disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and contains inappropriate register choices. Using the word 'brats' to refer to children or people playing sports is highly informal and unsuitable for an IELTS Academic task. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'downfall in percentile' and 'hanging up with peers'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic collocations (e.g., 'a significant increase', 'remained stable', 'accounted for') and avoid colloquialisms or slang entirely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The pie chart illustrate', 'individuals who travel... is'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'people use to relax'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or slightly flawed complex sentences. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is weak. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, and practice constructing more complex sentences with accurate subordinate clauses.
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