Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts compares the day spent by working adults on various activites in a country during the period of 1958 and 2008. The scales are in percentages.

Overall, it is evident that the adults spent their maximum time of the day in working and least time spent in playing sports. The time spent with family or friends by working adults have been reduced over the period.

To commence with, in 1958, most of the time of a day was spent in working at aorund 33% which increased by nearly 10% in 2008. In 1958, 8% of the day was spent in relaxing at home in latter year it increased and stood at 13% in 2008.Working adults spent their 32% of the day in sleeping in 1958. However, it decreased in 2008 to 25%.

Furthermore, in 1958, adults spent 19% of the day with thier family and friends, that reduced to 6% in 2008. Young adults spent time on travelling to work in 1958 and 2008 accounted figure of 2% and 7% respectively. Time spent on playing sports in 1958 and 2008 were almost similar at around 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the pie charts and provides a clear overview. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two years rather than simply listing data for each year separately. For instance, instead of stating percentages for 1958 and 2008 in isolation, you could use comparative language to highlight the magnitude of change more effectively. The data is generally accurate, though ensure all figures are clearly linked to the correct categories to avoid ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'However' to guide the reader. While the progression is clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the phrase 'in latter year it increased', which lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point back to the intended noun would help the flow of the essay feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accounted', 'period', and 'evident'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'accounted figure of 2%' and 'aorund' (a typo). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise reporting verbs and adverbs to describe the trends, such as 'witnessed a significant rise' or 'remained relatively stable'. The current vocabulary is functional but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts compares', 'time... have been reduced') and missing articles ('in working', 'in latter year'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but there are minor slips that occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic agreement errors and ensuring consistent use of articles. Increasing the variety of complex structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases, would also enhance your score.

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