Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the day spent by working adults on the various activities in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, adults spent their significant time at work place in both the years. After working such a long time they preferred to take rest while traveling and hangout with friends and family had the lowest percentage of spending hours.
In 1958, working hour accounted of 33% slightly followed by sleeping hours at 32%. Further, youngster invested nearly 19% going out with their kith and kin. However, playing outdoor games, relaxing at home and traveling to work contributed approximately 7%, 8% and 2% respectively.
On the other hand, in 2008, working hours increased significantly to 42% whereas sleeping hours and going out with companions and family reduced drastically to 25% and 6%. However, traveling and relaxing at house experienced a great increment. Adults engaging their time on sports activities remained stable throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. You successfully identified the significant increase in working hours and the decline in sleeping and social time. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for example, you mentioned that 'youngster invested nearly 19% going out', but the chart refers to 'working adults', not specifically youngsters. Additionally, the claim that sports activities 'remained stable' is a good observation, but the overall summary could be more precise by highlighting the most dramatic shifts more clearly. The response is well-structured and addresses the prompt effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 1958', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through the data. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition 'After working such a long time they preferred to take rest' is a bit abrupt. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods, which helps the reader follow the comparison. Overall, the information is presented in a coherent manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'significantly'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'kith and kin' (which is an idiom not typically used in academic reports) and 'relaxing at house' (should be 'at home'). The phrase 'great increment' is also slightly unnatural in this context. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, more precise academic terminology would elevate the score. You should focus on using more standard collocations for describing data trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'working hour accounted of 33%' (should be 'accounted for'), 'at work place' (should be 'at the workplace'), and 'in both the years' (should be 'in both years'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. You should pay closer attention to article usage, preposition choices, and subject-verb agreement to improve the accuracy of your writing.
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