Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE PROVIDED PIE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION HOW WORKING YOUNGSTERS IN A PARTICULAR NATION ALLOCATE THIER TIME FROM 1958 TO 2008.
OVERALL,OFFSPRINGS ALLOCATE THIER MOST OF THE TIME AT WORKING. HOWEVER,YOUNGSTERS SPEND MINIMUM TIME AT TRAVELLING TO WORK IN GIVEN TIME PERIOD.
IT IS CRYSTAL CLEAR THAT, IN 1958YOUNSTERS SPEND THIER 33% TIME ON WORKING WHILE 60 YEAR THE OFFSPRING SPEND 9 PERCENT MORE TIME ON SAME WORK. IN ADDITION, RELAXING AT HOME AND SLEEPING HAD 8% AND 32% IN 1958 HOWEVER IN 2008 THE REALAXING BECAME DOUBLE BUT THE SLEEPING PERCENT REDUCED BY 7%.
FURTHERMORE, THERE WAS ONLY 5 PERCENT MORE INTRESTING YOUNSTERS IN TRAVELING TO WORK IN 2008. MOREOVER, IN 1958 AND 2008 ADULTS HAV THE SAME PERCENTAGE IN PLAYING SPORTS BY 7. IN ADDITION, THERE WAS HUGE DIFFERENCE IN GOING OUT WITH FRIENDS AND FAMILY IN 1958 THAT WAS AROUND 19% BUT IT DECRECED FASTLY BY ONLY 7% AFTER 60 YEAR .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but there are significant issues with accuracy and interpretation. You incorrectly identify the subjects as 'youngsters' and 'offspring' rather than 'working adults,' which misrepresents the data. Furthermore, several figures are miscalculated or misstated, such as claiming the percentage of time spent working increased by 9% when the data shows a different trend, and stating that relaxing 'became double' without clear evidence. While you identify some main features, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the misidentification of the population group prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and double-check your data extraction against the provided charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and awkward phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In addition,' 'Furthermore,' and 'Moreover,' they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately given the context of the sentences. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between ideas is disrupted by the factual errors mentioned in the task achievement section. To improve, focus on ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one and that your cohesive devices are used to connect related ideas rather than just acting as sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several inappropriate word choices. Using terms like 'youngsters' and 'offspring' to describe 'working adults' is inaccurate and inappropriate for an academic report. There are also spelling errors such as 'thier' (their), 'intresting' (interested), 'realaxing' (relaxing), and 'decreced' (decreased). The phrase 'decreced fastly' is also non-standard. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise, academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation. Avoid informal or incorrect terminology when describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'THE PROVIDED PIE CHART ILLUSTRATES THE INFORMATION HOW...' (missing 'about'), 'OFFSPRINGS ALLOCATE THIER MOST OF THE TIME AT WORKING' (incorrect pluralization and preposition use), and 'ADULTS HAV THE SAME PERCENTAGE' (spelling). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common spelling and punctuation mistakes.
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