Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the pie chart below compares how adults used to manage their working time in a specific country in 1958 as compared to 2008

overall both charts show the proportion of daily routine of people in 1958 and 2008 but it has changed throughout the time .By comparing to the chart in both the years the working working is the dominant with 42% in 2008 and 33% in 1958 followed by sleeping time .Although the percentage of going out with friends and family has a huge downfall in 2008 as compared to 1958 . while relaxing time has slightly increased in 2008 .On the other hand playing sports remained same in through out the decades with 7% .However the time taken to the work place is increased from 2% to 7%

The pie chart below tries to inform us that how the life of people have been changed throughout the years from 1958 to 2008 .In 1958 adults usually spent most of their in doing their work and sleeping . In 2008 they also use to spent most of their time on these things but the proportion have changed . In 1958 people 33% of the time was spend on working and 32% on sleeping while in 2008 42% of the time was consumed by working and only 25% was left to sleeping .However the time given to sports playing remained same in both years followed by 13% rest time in home in 2008 and 8% in 1958

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in sleeping time. However, the report is repetitive, as the student describes the same data points in two separate sections rather than synthesising the information into a cohesive overview and detailed body paragraphs. The data reporting is sometimes inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that 'playing sports remained same' while also mentioning different percentages. The overview is weak and lacks a clear, concise summary of the most significant trends. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and ensuring all comparisons are clearly supported by the provided figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. It is divided into two distinct parts that essentially repeat the same information, which disrupts the flow of the response. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the overview from the supporting details. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'However' and 'On the other hand', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The lack of clear progression between ideas makes the response difficult to follow. To improve, organize the essay into a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two distinct body paragraphs that group related data points together.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'huge downfall', 'time taken to the work place', and 'playing sports' are basic and sometimes unnatural. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'the working working is the dominant' and 'the proportion have changed'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision or flexibility. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use more varied and precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'a significant decline', 'commute time', or 'a substantial increase', and ensure that collocations are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the proportion have changed'), incorrect verb tenses ('use to spent'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency. Developing a wider range of complex structures, such as using subordinate clauses correctly, will also help improve your score.

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