Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates how working adults in a particular country spent their time in the year 1958 and 2008.

The two pie chart demonstrates significant alterations in percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities, in year 1958 and 2008

The diagram displays that, in both the years' most of the adults were spending the time in their work that is, 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008 which rose by 9%. The time for sleeping declines from 32% to 25% but the time for relaxing at home increases and went from 8% to 13%. Then the percentage of spending time for playing sports had slight change, as it goes from 6% to 7%. After that, the days to go out with family/friends went down from 19% to 6% and finally, time for travelling to work surges from 2% to 7%.

The findings of both the pie charts exhibits the details about the various activities on which working adults spend their day.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the data and made relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. You covered all categories provided in the charts. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph that highlights the most significant trends, such as the shift from social activities to work and travel. While you mention individual changes, a more analytical approach that groups these trends would improve the score. The final sentence is somewhat redundant and does not add new information to the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is somewhat mechanical. You rely heavily on simple transition words like 'Then' and 'After that', which makes the flow feel repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and the connection between sentences could be more sophisticated. To improve, try to group related trends together—for example, discussing the activities that increased versus those that decreased—rather than listing them one by one in the order they appear on the chart.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is somewhat basic and repetitive. You use phrases like 'spent their time' and 'percentage of' multiple times. There are also some minor collocation errors, such as 'the days to go out', which is not a natural way to describe time allocation. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'allocated to', 'witnessed a surge', or 'experienced a decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are several grammatical errors throughout the text that affect the precision of your writing. For example, 'The two pie chart demonstrates' should be 'The two pie charts demonstrate' (subject-verb agreement). Additionally, 'in both the years' most of the adults were spending' is awkward; 'in both years, most adults spent' would be more accurate. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. Incorporating more complex sentences, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, would demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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