Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The two pie charts illustrate how working adults in a particular country spent their time based on going out with friends/family, working, playing sports, traveling to work, sleeping and relaxing at home in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, working accounted for the highest proportion over the period, followed by sleeping. In addition, playing sports remained unchanged throughout the period. By contrast, traveling to work accounted for the lowest proportion in the first pie chart, and going out with friends/family recorded the lowest proportion in the second pie chart.
Regarding the percentages in 1958, working recorded the highest figures, at 33%, following this, sleeping recorded the second-highest figures, at 32%. In contrast, traveling to work represented the lowest percentage, at just 2%.
Turning to the proportions in 2008, working dominantly represented the highest percentage, at 42%. Following this, sleeping represented the second-highest percentage, at 25%. Furthermore, sports accounted for 7% of the proportion in both pie charts. By contrast, going out with friends/family represented the lowest proportion, at just 6%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response successfully identifies the main features of the pie charts and makes relevant comparisons between the two years. You have highlighted the significant shifts in working and sleeping patterns, as well as the stability of sports participation. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the trends. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately represented; for instance, you mentioned 'going out' as the lowest in 2008, but the data suggests 'relaxing at home' or 'traveling' might have different values depending on the specific chart interpretation. Overall, the task is well-addressed with a clear focus on the key changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the specific years. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In addition', 'By contrast', and 'Turning to' helps guide the reader through the information effectively. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the general trends from the specific data points. The progression of ideas is smooth, and the referencing is clear throughout the text. The structure is sound and supports the overall clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'accounted for', 'proportion', 'recorded', and 'dominantly'. The language is generally precise and appropriate for an academic report. However, there is some repetition of phrases like 'highest proportion' and 'lowest percentage'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms or descriptive phrases to express the same concepts. The vocabulary is adequate for the task and does not impede communication, though it lacks the sophisticated, less common lexical items required for the highest band scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The response demonstrates a good control of grammar with a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are error-free, and punctuation is used correctly. There are no significant grammatical errors that impede understanding. While you have used some complex structures, the range could be further expanded by incorporating more varied subordinating conjunctions or passive voice constructions to describe the data. The current level of accuracy is high, and the writing is consistently clear and easy to follow throughout the response.
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