Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The two pie charts illustrate how working adults in a particular country spent their time based on going out with friends/family, working, playing sports, traveling to work, sleeping and relaxing at home in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, working accounted for the highest proportion over the period, followed by sleeping. In addition, playing sports remained unchanged throughout the period. By contrast, traveling to work accounted for the lowest proportion in the first pie chart, and going out with friends/family recorded the lowest proportion in the second pie chart.
Regarding the percentages in 1958, working recorded the highest figures, at 33%, following this, sleeping recorded the second-highest figures, at 32%. In contrast, traveling to work represented the lowest percentage, at just 2%.
Turning to the proportions in 2008, working constituted the highest percentage, at 42%. Following this, sleeping represented the second-highest percentage, at 25%. Furthermore, sports accounted for 7% of the proportion in both pie charts. By contrast, going out with friends/family represented the lowest proportion, at just 6%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 8.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the charts, including the main trends and specific data points for both years. You successfully identified the highest and lowest proportions and made relevant comparisons between the two time periods. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. To reach a higher band, ensure that you explicitly mention all categories shown in the charts; for instance, 'relaxing at home' and 'traveling to work' are mentioned, but the data for 'relaxing at home' is omitted in the body paragraphs, which is a minor omission.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the specific years. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'By contrast', 'Regarding', and 'Turning to' are used effectively to guide the reader through the data. The progression of ideas is smooth, and each paragraph has a clear central topic. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for this type of task, contributing to the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'accounted for', 'constituted', and 'recorded the highest figures' are used appropriately. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive, particularly the reliance on 'recorded' and 'represented'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms or descriptive verbs to describe the data, such as 'comprised', 'made up', or 'fluctuated'. The spelling is accurate throughout, and the word choice is generally precise enough to communicate the intended meaning without difficulty.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are error-free, and the grammar is generally accurate, which ensures that the meaning is always clear. There are no significant grammatical errors that impede communication. To achieve a higher band, you could aim to use a wider variety of complex structures, such as participial phrases or more sophisticated subordinating clauses, to demonstrate greater grammatical flexibility. Currently, the sentence structures are functional but follow a somewhat predictable pattern.
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