Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The following pie chart compares in what way the functioning senior in a specific state utilize their span of time in the year 1958 as well as 2008

overall, initially the amount persons who were not involved in any kind of activity was highest, furthermore the number of individuals who were doing work was the highest

The first diagram illustrates from the first graph that the people who were exploring the outside world for income was lowest from the rest however in the subsequent graph tells us that there is an upgrade 7% to in the citizens who were travelling for earning. in the first graph the amount of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. The content is incomplete, as the text cuts off abruptly mid-sentence. While you attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the data. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear summary of the main features and a comparison between the two years. Because the response is under-length and lacks a coherent conclusion or full development of the data, it does not address the task requirements sufficiently.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the sentences are disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the awkward transition 'furthermore the number of individuals who were doing work was the highest'. The lack of proper punctuation and the incomplete nature of the sentences make it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details for each year.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'functioning senior' and 'exploring the outside world for income' are unnatural and do not accurately describe the data provided in the charts. There is a reliance on basic vocabulary, and the word choice often obscures the intended meaning. To achieve a higher band, you need to use more precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant increase', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary and focusing on correct collocations will help improve your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the run-on sentence in the introduction and the incomplete sentence at the end. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. For example, 'the amount persons' should be 'the number of people'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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