Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pie chart illustrates the layout of working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and the proposed to be made changes in 2008.

Overall it can be seen that, comparing to both year the young adults on various activities climb in Working. Whereas, less spent time in spent in going out with friends/family.

To commence, in 1958, majority 32% of sleeping of individuals was trying to relax their body and comfortable their time routine in their daily life. However, also 8% of the old age person Relaxing at home and were making exercise daily. on account of earn more money approximately 33% of individuals was trying to work hard in their companies.

on the other hand, Nevertheless, several changes to be made in 2008, replay of their daily time. the ratio are hiking in the sleeping and working, as well as in the less the percentage are using in the going out with friends and family and playing sports games. Finally, also many citizen are trying to spent time in relaxing at home to make yoga and make fit for the future to compartable on it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The information presented is often confusing and does not accurately reflect the trends shown in the charts. For example, the description of the 1958 data as 'trying to relax their body' is an inaccurate interpretation of the category 'sleeping'. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview of the main features, and the comparisons between 1958 and 2008 are poorly developed and difficult to follow. The content is largely descriptive of personal interpretations rather than objective data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is often inappropriate or mechanical, such as the misuse of 'To commence' and 'on the other hand, Nevertheless'. Referencing is unclear, and the relationship between sentences is frequently obscured by grammatical errors. The overall arrangement of information does not facilitate a smooth reading experience, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary range is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'layout of working adults', 'proposed to be made changes', and 'compartable on it'. These errors frequently impede communication, as the intended meaning is often lost. The student relies on basic, repetitive language and struggles to use terminology relevant to describing statistical data, such as 'percentages', 'proportions', or 'trends'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of control over sentence structure, with many sentences being fragmented or ungrammatical, such as 'the ratio are hiking in the sleeping and working'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex structures. The errors are pervasive and occur in almost every sentence, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the information presented.

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