Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The two pie graphs illustrate proportion of the day spent by the working individuals on different types of activities in a particular nation during 1958 and 2008.
Overall, it is evident that activities done by adults have seen a significant change over the period. The number of working individuals rose subsequently, whereas sleeping trend has reduced slightly. Other activities like travelling to work and relaxing at home experienced noticeable surplus.
During 1958, a large proportion of activities was held by sleeping and working individuals, 32% and 33% respectively. While amongst other activities, going out with friends and family exhibited highest proportion than of relaxing at home and playing sports. Travelling to work remained lowest trend.
By contrast, activities in 2008, experienced dramatic changes, particularly in terms of working people and sleeping ones. Although sleeping proportion fell to 25%, yet working individuals peaked at 42%. Activities like relaxing at home and travelling to work also rose significantly. While going out with friends and family and playing sports declined over time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. You successfully identified the key trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in sleep. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by imprecise terminology; for example, referring to 'working individuals' as a category of time spent is inaccurate, as the charts measure time spent on activities, not the number of people. To reach a higher band, ensure that the data points are described with greater precision and that the distinction between the activity and the participants is clear throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, and you use cohesive devices such as 'By contrast' and 'Although' to link information. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as in the phrase 'sleeping ones' or 'working individuals', which creates minor confusion regarding whether you are discussing the activity or the people. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'exhibited', and 'dramatic changes'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, 'noticeable surplus' is not the correct way to describe an increase in time spent, and 'lowest trend' is an awkward collocation. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends and ensure that your word choices accurately reflect the data presented in the charts rather than using generic descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the' before 'proportion') and awkward phrasing like 'activities was held by sleeping'. Additionally, there are minor punctuation and preposition errors throughout the text. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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