Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the pie chart illustrates the information about the percentage of peoples spent their time on various activities in a particular country between 1958 and 2008 .
the three main activities in 1958 were going out with friends or family , sleeping , and working , with 19% ,32% and 33% respectively . however, the time of working increased the almost half in 2008 . going out with friends \ family time saw a notable decrease of 6% .similarly , th
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some key features, such as the percentages for 1958 and the trend for working hours, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. To achieve a higher band, you must provide a complete overview, include all relevant data points, and ensure the response meets the length requirement to allow for a full development of the information presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt to introduce the topic and use cohesive devices like 'however' and 'similarly', the abrupt ending prevents a logical progression of ideas. Paragraphing is also inconsistent. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose—an introduction, an overview, and detailed body paragraphs—and use linking words more naturally to connect your comparisons between the two years.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and contains several errors, such as 'peoples' instead of 'people' and 'spent their time' used incorrectly in the opening sentence. There is a limited range of vocabulary, and the phrasing is somewhat repetitive. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant rise', rather than relying on simple verbs like 'increased' or 'saw'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('peoples spent') and punctuation. The sentence structures are simple, and the incomplete nature of the text makes it difficult to assess your ability to use complex structures effectively. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses when discussing past data, and proofreading for minor errors like capitalization and missing articles.
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