Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrated the working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, the working adults and sleeping adults were higher in percentages of the day in 1958 to 2008 as compared to other activities, which are lowest interest like playing sports, travelling, and going out with friends or family.
Firstly, the accounted for by the day spent by working adults was higher at 33%, twice as high as 42% in 2008. In addition, the sleeping adults constituted a high percentage, up to 32% in 1958, and marginally fell to 25% in 2008.
Furthermore, going out with family or friends was 19% in 1958 and slightly decreased to 6% in 2008, and travelling to work in 1958 is 2% and sharply increased up to 7% in the year of 2008, while relaxing at home was 8% in 1958 and 13% in 2008. However, the playing sports remain steady at all the years up to 7%.
In the summary, the sleeping adults and working adults are more represented in both years as compared to other activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features and comparing the data between 1958 and 2008. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, you state that working hours were '33%, twice as high as 42% in 2008', which is mathematically contradictory and factually incorrect based on the provided charts. Additionally, the overview is somewhat confusing, as you refer to 'sleeping adults' as a category rather than the activity of sleeping. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed accurately and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, such as the shift in working hours or the decline in social activities, rather than just listing categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and confusing sentence structures, such as the opening sentence which lacks a clear subject-verb relationship. The concluding paragraph is also somewhat repetitive and does not effectively synthesize the information. To reach a higher band, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and occasionally imprecise. Phrases like 'sleeping adults' and 'working adults' are used to describe activities, which is inaccurate; it is the time spent on these activities, not the adults themselves, that is being measured. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'lowest interest like playing sports'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Expanding your range to include more academic verbs and nouns related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', 'proportion') would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'The pie charts illustrated the working adults... spent their time' is grammatically incorrect, as the charts illustrate how time was spent. There are also issues with tense consistency and preposition usage, such as 'in the year of 2008' and 'remain steady at all the years'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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