Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided pie charts illustrate the percentage of how adult workers were utilizing their time in day in the year of 1958 and 2008.
Overall, it can be seen that, majority of adult spent their time on working in 1958.Morever,in 2008 scenario remains same.
To begin with 1958,The most amount of time had spent on working with 33% by adults, while only 2% time utilized on travelling to work. Moreover, similar percentage to working spent on sleeping with around 32%.Further, nearly one fifth portion spent on family and friend time. At the end ,relaxing at home accounted for 8%.
On the otherside, area of working was increased to 42%,with the most important feature. In 2008,adults were started playing sports in almost 7% of their day time. Moreover, portion of relaxing at home and travelling to work was rose, with 13%,7% respectively. While, percentage had dropped in family time to 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, identifying the key trends such as the increase in working hours and the shift in leisure activities. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the comparison between 1958 and 2008 is hindered by inaccurate data reporting; you mention 'sleeping' at 32% in 1958, but the prompt implies a focus on activity categories where some data points are misread or lack sufficient comparative depth. While you identify the main trends, the lack of precise data handling and the omission of some key comparative analysis prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the overview to the specific years. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'On the otherside' are used incorrectly to introduce a new time period, and the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow of ideas is interrupted by awkward phrasing, which makes the text feel disjointed in places. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'spent', 'utilized', and 'increased' throughout the response. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the most amount of time had spent' (grammatically awkward) and 'scenario remains same' (unnatural). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning of the charts, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, you should focus on using more varied synonyms and precise academic collocations to describe trends and data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. Frequent errors in article usage ('the year of 1958', 'the most amount of time'), verb tense ('had spent', 'was rose'), and punctuation (missing spaces after commas and periods) are noticeable. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, to ensure your writing is more grammatically sound.
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