Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The provided pie-charts compare the differences between how working adults are engaged in different activities in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, it is evident that people have spent more time working, travelling to work, and relaxing at home compared to previous year. Whereas percent for sleeping and going out with friends and family have declined.
To begin with, in 1958 adult spent 35% of their total time working the percentage have
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to address the task. You have provided an introduction and a partial overview, but the response cuts off abruptly before describing the data in any detail. To achieve a higher band, you must complete the description of the main features and provide a full comparison of the two years. Because the response is incomplete, it fails to present a clear summary of the data, resulting in a low score for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While you used a transition word like 'Overall' and 'To begin with', the lack of a complete structure makes it difficult to assess your ability to organize information. Cohesive devices are present but are not used to link a developed argument or a full report. To improve, ensure you have a clear introduction, a body paragraph for each year or category, and a concluding summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. You correctly used terms like 'pie-charts' and 'engaged in', but the range is very limited due to the brevity of the text. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'previous year' (which should be 'the previous period' or 'the earlier year') and 'percent for' (which should be 'the percentage of time spent on'). Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to data analysis will help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar contains several errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'how working adults are engaged in' is slightly awkward, and 'the percentage have' shows a subject-verb agreement error. The sentence structure is simple, and the unfinished sentence at the end prevents an assessment of your ability to use complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound before moving on to more complex structures.
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