Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie charts illustrate a comparisons between working adults that how they devided their time in different activities in year 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is cleary seen that working, Relaxing at home, and travelling to work increased, while going out with friends and family and sleeping notice huge decreased.

People were spend 2% of their time on Trevelling to work which increased by 5 precentage point, following same, public use

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the ability to address the task. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary of the data. Key features, such as the specific percentages for all categories, are missing or incorrectly stated. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear overview, and include sufficient data points to support your descriptions. The current length prevents a full development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of development and the abrupt ending make it difficult to follow a logical progression. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the paragraphing is not effectively used to separate ideas. To improve, you should organize your essay into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data comparisons. Using linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' would help connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors that hinder clarity, such as 'devided' (divided), 'cleary' (clearly), and 'Trevelling' (travelling). You also use 'notice huge decreased' instead of 'noticed a huge decrease'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using precise terminology for describing data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant rise'. Expanding your range of synonyms and ensuring correct word forms will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('People were spend') and incorrect word order ('how they devided their time'). The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb tenses when describing past data. You should also practice using a mix of simple and complex sentences. For example, instead of 'People were spend 2%', use 'The percentage of time spent on travelling increased from 2% to 7%'.

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