Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie charts illustrate the information of working of young generation in one nation who use their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, in both the years adults had used their minutes in working and second in sleeping. while, they were least interested travelling to work in both year and in 2008 they were bored of playing sports.
In 1958, 33% of youngesters were spenting their time on work. They spent 32% minutes on sleeping and taking rest. 8% adults were staying at their home and relaxing. Going out with friends and family and spenting time with them were enjoyed by 19%. Only 2% adults used their time in travelling to work.
In 2008, 42% grown-up people used their minutes on working. They use 25% time on sleeping and taking rest. 13% time they used to stay at home and relaxe. Only 7% mature people spent their minutes on travelling to work and playing sport. 6% of adults goes out with their family and friends.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, identifying the primary activities in 1958 and 2008. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. The overview is slightly inaccurate, as it mentions 'bored of playing sports' in 2008, which is an interpretation not supported by the data. Furthermore, the comparison between the two years is limited. To reach a higher band, you should focus on clearly highlighting the most significant changes, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent sleeping, rather than simply listing percentages for each category. Ensure your summary remains objective and avoids subjective interpretations like 'bored'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, the transition 'while, they were least interested' is grammatically awkward and does not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'they' to refer to different groups of people. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'consequently', 'whereas') to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'used their minutes' and 'spent'. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'youngesters', 'grown-up people', and 'mature people', which are not appropriate for an academic report. Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'relaxe' and 'spenting'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise, academic vocabulary to describe data trends, such as 'allocated', 'devoted', 'proportion', and 'fluctuated'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., '6% of adults goes out'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'adults had used their minutes'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'illustrate the information of working of young generation'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data.
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