Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts shows how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

The given chart shows various activities of adults in two different years.

In 1958, total six activities were reported. the reported activities included working, traveling to work, sleeping, relaxing at home, going out with friends and family and playing sports. The similar activities with various percentages could be shown in 2008.

The ratio of the working people, increased by 9 percent in 2008. In contrast to this, the ratio of people sleeping decreased in the same year.

The major change in the activity could be noticed in going out with family and friends which decreased in 2008 as the rate of the people relaxing at home gradually increased in the same year. not much change could be seen in the sports but

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some trends, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in sleeping, the analysis is incomplete. Several categories are mentioned but not described in terms of their data, and the conclusion is cut off mid-sentence. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview of all categories and include specific data points (percentages) to support your comparisons. The current response lacks the depth required to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, such as 'In contrast to this' and 'The major change'. However, the lack of a complete final paragraph and the abrupt ending make the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next using a wider variety of linking words, while ensuring the response is fully completed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'various activities', 'major change', and 'not much change' are functional but lack the precision expected at higher bands. You rely on simple descriptors and struggle to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuation', 'proportion', or 'significant shift'. To improve, try to vary your word choices and use more precise terminology to describe the trends shown in the charts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'The pie charts shows' (subject-verb agreement) and 'total six activities were reported' (missing article). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with lowercase letters starting sentences (e.g., 'the reported activities'). While you attempt some complex sentence structures, the frequent errors and the incomplete nature of the final sentence limit the range and accuracy. Focus on proofreading for basic errors like subject-verb agreement and capitalization to improve your score.

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