Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The twice pi charts illustrates how working adults in the specific country devote their time on different activities in 1958 and 2008. while give the proportion of the day send by working adults on various activities.
Overall, the two pi charts demonstrates working is highly increase in both of years While the most decrease activity is travelling to work. Moreover the plying sport almost same in the two period of years.
The day consume in working in 1958 and 2008 rose 33 and 42 percent. while the most decrease in the year of 1958 is travelling to work is 2% and 2008 is 7 percent. In contrast, sleeping in 1958 and 2008 32 and 25 percent.
On the other hands, playing sport reaming stable in both of years which is 7 percent. outing with friends and family and 1928 and 2008 which show 19 and 6 percent. the relaxing at home in 1958 and 2008 is 19 and 13 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided data. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the reporting of figures. For example, you state that working hours rose to 42 percent, but you incorrectly describe the 1958 figure as 33 percent when the data shows 33 percent for 1958 and 42 percent for 2008. Furthermore, the description of 'travelling to work' as decreasing is factually incorrect based on the provided data, as it increased from 2% to 7%. The overview is also weak, as it fails to clearly highlight the most significant trends. To improve, ensure you carefully transcribe data and focus on identifying the most prominent changes rather than listing every figure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast' and 'On the other hands', they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. To improve, focus on using transition words more accurately and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus, such as grouping similar trends together rather than listing them randomly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'is' or 'show' and struggle with word choice, such as 'twice pi charts' instead of 'two pie charts' and 'plying sport' instead of 'playing sports'. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'highly increase' instead of 'a significant increase'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To improve, practice using a wider variety of reporting verbs (e.g., 'accounted for', 'witnessed', 'remained constant') and ensure you use the correct terminology for describing trends and proportions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'pi charts illustrates'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple and often fragmented, such as 'while give the proportion of the day send by working adults'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with periods placed incorrectly within sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and article usage.
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