Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of adult's various activities in a day in the year 1958 and 2008. They compare how their routines have developed and changed over the time.

Overall, there are significant changes in all the mentioned activities between both charts except the playing sports, which remained the same.

In 1958, 33 percent of the daily time was given to work which showed a significant raise , going up to 42 percent in 2008. Similarly, relaxing time at home was 8 percent in 1958 but took a sharp increase of 13 percent. As for the sleeping time, people in 1958 spent 32 percent of their time sleeping while in 2008, it declined to being only 25 percent.

Work related travel consumed 2 percent of the time in 1958 but it went up to 7 percent in 2008. Meeting with family and friends had 19 percent of the time but took a huge change and decreased to 6%. While the time playing sports and engaged in physical activities remained the same as before.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the charts, including the main trends and comparisons. You successfully identified the increase in work and relaxing time, as well as the decrease in sleep and socialising. However, the analysis is slightly mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesising the data into a more cohesive narrative. To reach a higher band, ensure you group related data more effectively and provide a more nuanced overview of the shifts. For example, noting that work and work-related travel both increased while social time decreased would provide a stronger analytical perspective.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Similarly', 'As for', and 'While', which help the flow of information. However, the paragraphing is somewhat unbalanced, with a very short overview and a dense body section. The transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus, which will help the reader follow your argument more effortlessly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrate', 'significant changes', and 'declined'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'took a sharp increase of 13 percent' (it should be 'an increase to' or 'an increase of 5 percent') and 'took a huge change'. The phrasing 'percentage of adult's various activities' is also slightly awkward. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations for describing statistical trends and ensure your terminology is grammatically accurate in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'except the playing sports' (should be 'except for playing sports') and 'engaged in physical activities' (should be 'engaging in'). Additionally, there is a minor punctuation error in 'significant raise ,'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions to enhance the accuracy of your writing.

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