Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts demonstrates information about the how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008 .
By having a cursory glance, it is vivid that, Firstly , in 1958 , day spent by working adults 33% , which of the biggest percentages of the group . After that , Relaxing at home 8% , which of the smallest percentage of the group . After words , other various activities , travelling to work only 2% . Furthermore , the going out with friends and family members were 19% day spent adults . Whereas , 32% sleeping on time adults on various activities .
Moving further ahead , it is lucid that , primarily , in 2008 , day spent by working adults working 42% which one of the biggest percentages in 2008 . However , Relaxing at home only 13% . Moreover , sleeping at home were only 25% and only playing sports 7% . Consequently , spent time travelling to work around 7% which one of the lowest percentages . Along with this, going out with friends and family members were around 6% .
By giving general overview , both years 1958 and 2008 , working which one of the most biggest percentages . While , travelling and playing sports smallest percentages in both years .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The data presentation is fragmented and often confusing, such as stating '33%, which of the biggest percentages' without clearly identifying the activity. Several figures are mentioned without context, and the comparison between the two years is weak. The overview provided at the end is too brief and does not effectively highlight the significant trends or shifts in time allocation. To improve, you must clearly identify the categories and ensure the data points are linked to the correct activities, providing a more structured comparison between the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as 'After words' instead of 'Afterwards' and 'By giving general overview'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. Referencing is often unclear, and the lack of logical flow between sentences hinders the overall coherence. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words correctly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic structures. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'day spent by working adults' and 'it is vivid that'. The phrasing is often unnatural, and the student struggles to use precise terminology to describe the data (e.g., 'the going out with friends'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage prevent a higher score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and proportions is essential.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The pie charts demonstrates'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction. Complex sentence structures are largely absent or attempted with significant errors, such as 'which of the biggest percentages of the group'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using articles correctly. Reducing the frequency of these errors is necessary to improve the overall accuracy and readability of your work.
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