Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie charts illustrate how working adults spent their time in various activities in the yeaar 1958 and 2008.
According to the data,the highest percentage in both the years was occupy by working accounted for 33% in 1958 and 42% in 2008.whereas,this was followed by sleeping accounted for 32% in 1958 and 25% in 2008.Morever,for going out with friends or family accounted 19%in 1958.However,in 2008 it was only 6%.which is almost three times less than 19% in 1958.
Now,relaxing at home by adults was only 15% in 2008 whereas in 1958 it was only 8%.Morever,adults spent less time doing travelling to work in 1958 which was only 2%.conversely,adults spent less time in 2008 was on going out with friends or family which was just 6%.
Furthermore,for playing games adults only spent 7% and 3% in 2008 and 1958 respectively.
In closing,it can be seen that,working was done mostly by adults in both the years,whereas,playing games or travelling to work occupy only some time of adults.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview. While you identified the highest categories, the summary could be improved by grouping the data more effectively to highlight trends rather than just listing percentages. Some information is slightly repetitive or confusingly phrased, such as the comparison regarding 'travelling to work' and 'going out'. To improve, ensure you synthesise the data to show the 'big picture'—for example, noting that work-related time increased while leisure-related time decreased significantly over the 50-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Now, relaxing at home...' is an inappropriate transition for a data report, and 'Morever' is misspelled. The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel a bit stilted. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Conversely') more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'spent' and 'accounted for'. There are also several errors in word choice and form, such as 'was occupy by' (should be 'was occupied by') and 'doing travelling' (should be 'travelling'). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms for data reporting, such as 'constituted,' 'represented,' or 'allocated.' Additionally, ensure you are using the correct word forms (e.g., nouns vs. verbs) to avoid awkward phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the highest percentage... was occupy'), missing articles, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas and periods). The sentence 'adults spent less time in 2008 was on going out' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small errors like missing 'the' or incorrect verb tenses, which currently detract from the overall quality of your writing.
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