Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the daily routine of adults of specific country in between 1958 and 2008.
Overall , pie chart manifests that most of the adults in particular country spend their maximum time on working and lesser time on travelling.
First of all, in 1958 adults spent their almost equal time on sleeping and working which is around 32 and 33 percent respectively . Consequently the whole trend changes and in 2008 citizens spent their plenty of hours on working which is 42 percent of their entire day . Furthermore sleeping percentage remain decreasing from 32 percent to 25 percent.
By looking other factors the chart demonstrates that in 1958 people spent their 19 percent of their day with friends and family but this trend significantly changes and now in 2008 they spent just 6 percent. But relaxing time at home have shown opposite trend and it increases from 8 percent to 13 percent. Time consumption on sports remains constant through out the years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview and identifies key trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family. However, the report lacks precision in data selection. For instance, it mentions 'travelling' in the overview, yet this category is not clearly analyzed or compared in the body paragraphs. Furthermore, the description of the data is sometimes imprecise, such as stating 'plenty of hours' instead of using the specific percentage provided. To reach a higher band, ensure all categories mentioned in the charts are addressed and use data more accurately to support your observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Consequently', 'Furthermore', and 'By looking at other factors', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'By looking other factors', which lacks a preposition. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the connection between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. Phrases like 'whole trend changes' and 'time consumption' are slightly unnatural in this context. There is some repetition of basic verbs like 'spent' and 'increases'. While the student successfully uses terms like 'percentage' and 'constant', the range is limited. To improve, the student should incorporate more sophisticated collocations related to data description, such as 'witnessed a significant rise' or 'remained stable', rather than relying on simple descriptive language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('of specific country', 'in particular country') and subject-verb agreement issues ('sleeping percentage remain decreasing', 'relaxing time... have shown'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on article usage and verb tense consistency would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.
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