Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This pie charts depicts the information about the percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities from 1958 to 2008.

Overall, The working activity dramatically increased in that time period which means they worked alot in their daily routine, while the sleeping habit has been decresed because the workinh schedule of the adults was increased.

To begin with, the working habit which create the upward trend towards adult's daily routine because it was 33% in 1958 and it suddenly reached upto 42% but this working schedules directly impacting on the sleeping cycle which is slightly decreased from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008. Additionally, Adults prefer to spent their day routine by relaxing their home and these numbers also slighly changed form 8% to 13%.

In 1958, The adult spent their day for the traveeling to work which was 2% but it also increased for various reasons in 7% in 2008. In addition to that, in 1958, the youngstars also spent their time with family and friends which was 19% but due to increase in work they did not get much time so it stood upto 6% in 2008. However, in 2008, Youngstars start giving their focus on playing sports for the day which is 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the claim that 'working activity dramatically increased' is a slight overstatement given the percentage change, and the interpretation of the data is occasionally hindered by unclear phrasing. While the key trends are identified, the response would benefit from a more precise description of the data points and a clearer distinction between the categories. The inclusion of 'youngstars' as a category is a misinterpretation of the data, as the charts refer to 'working adults' in general, not specifically young people.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'In addition to that'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the internal cohesion within sentences is occasionally weak due to grammatical errors, which can make the flow feel disjointed. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother to improve the overall logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several spelling errors, such as 'decresed', 'workinh', 'traveeling', and 'youngstars', which detract from the quality of the writing. The word choice is often repetitive or slightly inaccurate, such as using 'working habit' to describe a percentage of time spent on an activity. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'rose significantly' instead of 'upward trend towards') and ensure correct spelling of key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This pie charts depicts'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the sleeping habit has been decresed'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'these numbers also slighly changed form 8% to 13%'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the overall clarity of the report. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the score.

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