Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE PIE CHARTS DEPICTS THE PERCENTAGE OF WORKING ADULTS PEOPLE WAS SPENT THEIR TIME ON VARIOUS ACTIVITIES IN A PARTICULAR COUNTRY IN 1958 AMD 2008.
BY ANALYZING THE ILLUSTRATION, IT IS EVIDENT THAT IN 1958 INDIVIDUAL SPENT THEIR EXCESSIVE TIME ON WORKING THAT WAS 33% WHICH IS LEES BY 1% ON SLEEPING. BUT, IN 2008 THE PERCENTAGE WAS MORE THAN 9% AND 7% ON WORKING AND SLEEPING ORDERLY. MOREOVER, PEOPLE UTILISED THEIR TIME ON GOING OUT WITH FRIENDS OR FAMILY WAS 19% ON IT, WHICH IS GREATER THAN IN YEAR 2008 AND PEOPLE SPENT 6% ON THIS ACTIVITY.
PROBING AHEAD TO, TRAVELLING TO WORK AND RELAXING AT HOME WORKING ADUTLS DEVOTED THEIR TIME ON THESE ACTIVITIES WAS 2% AND 8% RESPECTIVELY IN 1958. MOVING FURTHER, IN 2008 SPENT TIME ON THOSE TASKS WAS HIGHER THAN 1958 THE DIFFERENCE WAS 5% .BUT IN THIS YERA ONE NEW ACTIVITY WAS INVOLVED IT WAS PLAYING SPORTS AND PEOPLE SPENT 7% TIME ON IT.
OVERALL, THE MAXIMUM TIME SPENT ON WORKING IN BOTH YEARS WHILE ,MINIMUM TIME ON TRAVELLING TO WORK IN 1958 AND GOING OUT WITH FAMILY AND FRIENDS IN 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is often inaccurate and confusing. For instance, the claim that working time was 33% in 1958 and that this was 'less by 1% on sleeping' is mathematically unclear and poorly expressed. The comparison between years is inconsistent, and the data interpretation is frequently flawed, such as the statement about the 9% and 7% increase. While the response identifies the main trends, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the failure to clearly highlight the most significant changes prevent it from reaching a higher band. The overview is present but lacks clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'Probing ahead to' and 'Moving further'. The logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two years. While the paragraphing is functional, the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed, and the transition between sentences often feels forced or unnatural, which limits the effectiveness of the overall organisation.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'excessive time on working' and 'orderly' (likely intended as 'respectively') demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'LEES' for 'less', 'ADUTLS' for 'adults', and 'YERA' for 'year'. The vocabulary is generally repetitive and lacks the precision required to describe statistical data effectively. While the meaning is usually retrievable, the frequent errors and restricted range of vocabulary significantly hinder the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('adults people was spent'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making them difficult to parse. For example, 'THE PIE CHARTS DEPICTS' shows a lack of basic agreement. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty and lead to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas. The high density of errors means that the reader must work hard to understand the intended meaning.
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