Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE pie chart compare how working adults in one country distributed their daily time across five different activities in 1958 and 2008. overall, working adults spent the largest portion of their day on working and sleeping in both years. over the 50 year period , the time dedicated to working and commuting increased, while time spent on sleeping and socializing decreased .in 1958 working was the most of time consuming activity at 33% closely followed by sleeping at 32% . However , by 2008 the percentage for working rose significantly to 42% , making it the dominant activity . in contrast , the time spent sleeping feel to 25% in 2008 . notably , time spent traveling to work saw a sharp five fold increase, growing from just 2% to 10% . for leisure activities , relaxing at home grew slightly from 14% in 1958 to 17% in 2008. on the other hand , going out with friends and family experienced a major decline ,dropping from 19% down to only 6% at the end of the period .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features and provided a clear comparison between the two years. You highlighted the key trends, such as the increase in working and commuting time and the decline in sleeping and socializing. The data is accurately reported, and the overview provides a good summary of the changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that you consistently use precise terminology and avoid minor inaccuracies in data interpretation. Your response covers all parts of the task well, and the information is appropriately selected to illustrate the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information effectively. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'in contrast,' 'notably,' and 'on the other hand,' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is somewhat limited, and the flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases. Additionally, some sentences are slightly disjointed. Improving the transition between sentences would help the text flow more naturally and demonstrate a more sophisticated control of cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'dominant activity,' 'sharp five-fold increase,' and 'major decline' are used effectively. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'feel' instead of 'fell' and 'time consuming' (which should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating a slightly wider range of more precise academic collocations would enhance the quality of your writing and help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters and inconsistent spacing around punctuation marks. There are also minor grammatical slips, such as 'THE pie chart compare' (should be 'compares') and 'time spent sleeping feel' (should be 'fell'). To improve, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring that your sentence structure remains consistent throughout the response.

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