Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
the percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities. In 1958 33% of time spent on working but in 2008 42% of time spent on working thats are comparatively high . In 1958 8% of time spent on relaxing but in 2008 13% time spent on relaxing at home thats is comparatively high than 1958 . In 1958 32% of time spent on sleeping but in 2008 25% of time is spent in sleeping that is higher than 1958. In 1958 2% of time spent travelling to work but in 2008 7% of time spent on traveling to work . In 1958 19% of time spent going out with friends or family but in 2008 6% of time is spent going out with friend ls and family . In 2008 7% of time is spent ok playing sports but in 1958 no one is spent time on playing sports.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the pie charts comparing 1958 and 2008, mentioning work, relaxing, sleeping, traveling, socializing, and sports. However, the data reporting contains significant mechanical errors, such as stating that relaxing increased while also stating contradictory figures, and the lack of a proper overview prevents it from reaching a higher band. Furthermore, the phrasing 'no one is spent time' demonstrates inaccuracies in data interpretation. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, aligning with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response suffers severely from poor paragraphing, as almost the entire text is lumped into a single run-on block following the introductory sentence. There is a lack of logical progression, and cohesive devices are repetitive, heavily relying on monotonous structures like 'In 1958... but in 2008...'. Furthermore, referencing is weak with repetitive use of phrases like 'thats is comparatively high'. These issues reflect Band 4 characteristics.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive throughout the response, relying on simple terms like 'time spent' and 'higher' or 'high'. There are noticeable errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'ok playing sports' and 'no one is spent time'. The range is limited and barely adequate for the task, causing some difficulty for the reader and fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures are severely limited and repetitive, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences with passive or passive-like constructions marred by frequent errors. Examples include '33% of time spent on working', 'thats are comparatively high', and 'no one is spent time on playing sports'. Punctuation is also faulty, with missing capitalization and extra spaces. These frequent errors distort meaning and place the response at Band 4.
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