Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts demonstrates show how working mature citizens in a particular nation allocate their time from 1958 to 2008.

Overall,it is clearly seen that the working activity had played dominant role in all years. While,least grown-ups like to travelling for work

To initiate with,in 1958 around,33% adults spent their time on working and ratio were increased in 2008 almost 42% and 8% mature people relaxing at home in 1958 and which was increased in 2008 and came at 13% and 32% grown-up allocate their time on sleeping and ratio were decreased in 2008 and aquire at 25%.

Moving ahead,in 1958 only 2% adults spent their time for travelling to work and around,5 % was increased in 2008 of travelling to work in 2008 and almost 19% adults like to go out with friends and family and in 2008 ratio instantly decreased and reached at 6%.Furthermore,7% mature people like to playing sports in 1958 and over a long period in 2008 ratio remain same approximately 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the two pie charts, noting key changes between 1958 and 2008 such as the increase in working time and sleeping time trends. However, the data reporting contains inaccuracies and awkward expressions, such as stating that '33% adults spent their time on working and ratio were increased in 2008 almost 42%'. The comparison is attempted, but some figures are stated in a confusing manner, which places the response around Band 5.5 to 6.0. The overall trend is correctly identified, but data selection needs greater precision to reach higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response attempts a logical structure using transitional phrases such as 'To initiate with', 'Moving ahead', and 'Furthermore'. However, paragraphing is weak, with multiple distinct ideas crammed together in a single block rather than being clearly separated. Cohesive devices are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, for example, 'and ratio were increased' or 'and which was increased'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical progression of comparisons between the two years. This aligns well with the Band 5 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is fairly basic and repetitive, utilizing terms like 'mature citizens', 'grown-ups', and 'ratio' repeatedly. There are frequent word choice and collocation issues, such as 'least grown-ups like to travelling for work' and 'aquire at 25%'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general topic of time allocation, the restricted range and frequent lexical errors prevent the response from achieving a Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writing relies heavily on simple and coordinate sentences joined by 'and', with very few successful complex structures. There are persistent grammatical errors throughout, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts demonstrates show'), tense confusion ('allocate their time from 1958 to 2008'), and missing prepositions or articles. Run-on sentences are common, such as '8% mature people relaxing at home in 1958 and which was increased in 2008 and came at 13%'. These frequent errors occasionally impede smooth reading, placing the grammar at a Band 5.

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