Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This graph shows how adults work in a particular country and spend their time in 1958s and 2008. I can see the percentage of the day spend by adults worker on different activities.now I am going to make complete comparisons in 1958 and 2008. in 1958 going out with friends/family is 19%'Travelling to work is 2%;sleeping at home is 32%; relaxing at home is 8%; working at office is 33%. I can also see the percentage of working adults that spend their time on various activities in 2008. Going out with friends/family is 6%;Sleeping at home is 25%

working at office 42%' relaxing at home 18% playing sports is 7% this is all the Information in the 2008 grap. these are the main features, and comparisons between 2008 and 1958 was shown in the graph

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, coming in at 135 words, which directly penalises the task achievement score. Furthermore, the content fails to adopt an appropriate academic tone, featuring conversational filler phrases such as 'I can see' and 'now I am going to make complete comparisons.' While the student attempts to list percentages for both years, the mechanical listing of data points without effective selection or a clear overview means the main features are not adequately reported. There is a lack of structured comparison, and key data points are stated in a raw, unintegrated manner. Consequently, this falls under Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text or disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, resulting in a mechanical and repetitive structure. For instance, the transition between sentences relies on simplistic repetition like 'I can also see' rather than logical progression. The sequencing of data is haphazard, mixing categories without a clear, guiding thread. Pronoun referencing and overall organisation fail to establish a clear flow of information. These weaknesses place the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on simple terms copied from the prompt such as 'spend their time', 'adults', and 'activities'. There is an inadequate range of vocabulary to discuss statistical data effectively. Furthermore, informal and conversational expressions like 'this is all the Information in the 2008 grap' are inappropriate for an academic task. Minor spelling and punctuation errors are also present, such as 'grap' instead of 'graph'. This performance aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and flawed complex structures. There are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'in 1958 going out...') and misuse of punctuation marks like apostrophes and commas (e.g., '1958s', '2008. in'). Subject-verb agreement and prepositional usage also show frequent inaccuracies (e.g., 'percentage of the day spend by adults worker'). These persistent errors frequently strain the reader and reflect Band 4.0 standards.

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